These two pieces have been written from two prospective's, the first will be very offensive to most, and rightly so...the second may feel very good to others...I can say that it doesn't to me, it was my first reaction. This poetry is a way to express things that wouldn't normally be ok any other place. Please read both together. Know that the path taken by our country in the aftermath will show what kind of nation we are and where we need to be. My prayers go out to all the family's of the slain, and injured.
Pull my pin
Bowling
for columbine’s got nothing on me
I’m
the one true Lone gunman, really
See
how powerful my master play unfolds
Pull
my pin Tear gas explodes
On
a crowd Of Dark knight watching
Chair
bound victims Scream as I’m dropping
Another
belt notch thirteen X or more
Pale
bodied empty skin bags hit the floor
The
whole world sees me lay my claim so masterful
Chris
McQueeney 7/21/12 12:32 A.M.
The unick has spoken
Only
a coward can claim
Some
sick sort of power
And
fame from quenching
The
light from those souls
Snuffing
out life with a click
Mother
fucker you have no balls
Your
manhood broken
The
unick has spoke
With
a gun he’s said to me
No
man, no man indeed
One
day the time will come
He
will take that long walk
Into
a very shallow hole
And
on that day I’m sure I will see
Him
blubber like a bitch
On
his way to old sparky
Chris
McQueeney 7/21/12 1:10 P.M
I hope you were able to make this far, thank you for reading my work :-)
9 comments:
You've captured the deranged mind of a killer and the emotions of his victims in two stunning verses. Very happy you took this risk.
i think you did well chris...i think writing allows us to see other perspectives or try to make sense of something that seems so senseless...there is no excuse...but there may be reason...some do it after intense bullying, so do i feel for them, yes...do i condone, no...is justice still needed, yes...i was traveling as this unfolded so i dont know as much about his motives or reasons but ugh man...sad for those affected....
how r u feeling today?
Thanks ben...it was like you said it was a risk on my part, I have no desire to hurt anyone but they came to me...and I didn't know what else to do
Hi Brian, as far as how am I feeling, not as bad still crappy though.
This kind of thing is f-ed up in the extreme To lose your humanity enough to slaughter 12 + people in a theatre sets off the same kind of rage in me I had when I wrote these poems...at first it was only going to be one poem...but the voice of each was so different I couldn't make the transition
My best friend's daughter lived in the town where the shooting happened. She moved home almost two weeks ago.
Your poems capture both sides of the tragedy, the derranged mindset of evil personified and the anger of the collective masses. It's too bad (in my humble opinion) that someone in that theater didn't have their permit to carry a concealed weapon. It may have saved lives. Unfortuantely, it's the law abiding citizens that follow gun laws and regulations - criminals and lunatics don't care.
Me...I carry.
it's these kind of events why i avoid watching the news. trying to make sense of senseless acts. impossible.
your words encompassing the event and the act...you did well.
You did well.
I found the pair of poems worked well together, but each is certainly strong enough to stand on its own. If an anthology is produced of people's poems and expressions about this massacre I would hope that your first poem, so powerful, would find its way into the work.
The juxtaposition of the two pieces was interesting, in the reaction it created in me as a reader. First the role play of a killer then the outrage of the action.
Although both explicit a reaction, the first reaction to the first poem overwhelms the reaction to the second. Interesting work.
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