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| sculpture: Jason deCaires Taylor |
They say that life is a journey
You have to experience to understand
I can see that being the case
They say the joy in life
Is in the living of it
That sounds ok to me
They say your life’s path
Can have meaning to others
I sure hope so
What they didn’t tell me
Is that no one above the surface
Can hear you scream
Chris McQueeney 1/15/2012 11:39PM
This is in response to the 100th prompt from Tess at magpie tales click here
21 comments:
Wow...the ending a sudden surprise.
I like this, very poignant. Well written.
Good one.... You are beginning to hit your stride. You have given me this small stone that will be published tomorrow -
Under Water
I'm gravid, drowning
in the bitter of old dreams,
pining for a bit
of the noonday sun.
ooo very nice...love that unexpected there in the end....it is chilling...
Enjoyed this... the ending is amazing.
oh golly...terrific
That last stanza was great. Nice construction!
Thanks for viewing my blog earlier.
Jamie
Ain't that the truth! ♥
I like the unexpected ending...
Kinda buries the platitudes, doesn't it?
Nice Magpie!
=)
Thank you Susie
@Christopher, thank you...and what the hell were you doing up at 2:30 in the morning?
@Brian, my ending kinda polar oppisite to your's...
Your welcome, thank you as well.
Sometimes, and thanks for visiting.
Thank you for the prompt, I have realy enjoyed joining in the tales.
Thank you, and yes it does!
I read your poem a few times because I enjoyed the way it was constructed. I like the message and the thinking. Thank you for sharing this and for visiting my blog.
....I'm sure your whispers sound and feel of thunder up against a loving ear
Please tell me more about this loving ear...
Sometimes I feel that way, muted and under the surface.
That last line is chilling! We really different directions. I did that Magpie too, again, different: http://writinginthebachs.blogspot.com/2012/01/siren-song.html
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