Of a mole
hill
Lifting this
mountain
Of a mole
hill Off my back
Like kicking
Or licking
the drink ing thing
Again
Over and over
again
Thoughts of me In your head
Loving me and
Wishing I was
dead
The thought
train
On tracks
that dig
And dig
And dig deeper
in your soul
Making it harder and harder
For we to let
Go
Of this
mountain
Of a mole Hill
Chris McQueeney 8/18/12 10:18 P.M.
7 comments:
You explore concepts like none other! :-)
relevant!
nicely done chris!
smiles...not that easy to let go at all....making more of something than what it is...
Dwight is my favorite character from 'The Office'. I just love his 'words-of-wisdom' so arrogantly proffered. Ha!
*I ♥ Beet Farmers*
Of A Mole Hill starts off from a position of strength (character is ridding self of unwanted/burdensome/cumbersome attitude toward some thing)
Then the perspective shifts with 'thoughts of me in your head, loving me and wishing I was dead'.
This threw me a bit, for with those words, the poem's main character abdicates the position of strength, giving it 'mountain status' again as opposed to 'mole hill status' - and becomes once again entangled with the very thing he sought to escape. Was this the intention based on the overall-theme of Making A Mountain Out Of A MoleHill, or did it just 'happen'? Interesting.
The tension here is aching. Nicely done. More, please!
I don't exactly agree with the idea that you shifted viewpoints but then I may know too much...can fill in too easily. That may mean this poem is not yet finished in that regard, can be confused as it stands. I have started over before myself. I think the molehill thing is good and I know the mountain. Your assignment should you choose to accept it is to make the molehills and mountains clear. I think you are right that they belong in a single poem.
This is a very personal poem...coming from two distinctive perspectives linked at the end...reading it again and thinking of that fact I decided to change it from one solid poem to a poem with three stanzas...I believe that offers the transition that I already knew was there. And no this is not current events.
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